I'm Back

After a nice break from blogging, I've returned. It was nice to not read much news and therefore not stress over bad writers. :)

This article from People.com is sharing the news that Jennifer Garner and Ben Affleck have a new baby in the house.



In the fifth paragraph, an unnecessary comma has invaded the sentence. In reality, there's not much to most of the "paragraphs" in the article, since 7 out of the 9 "paragraphs" are each really only one sentence long. I suppose the breaks are somewhat indicative of a separate thought, although the entire article is about one event. Maybe it is supposed to flow easier for the reader, but I think it's simply padding to make the article look bigger (and therefore more substantive) than it really is.

Comments

1 Response to "I'm Back"

Carlos said... January 8, 2009 at 3:13 AM

I was wondering if you'd given up on this blog. Glad you didn't. Love those stray commas!

About Ren

I have finally become so incensed by poor writing in the media that I've decided to create a blog detailing the errors that I find. Perhaps journalists will think about proofreading their work if they don't want to find themselves on here. If you see any examples, please e-mail them to me at r.tauman [at] gmail.com.

I don't expect the average person to be able to write well, but those who write for the public should at least know what they are doing.